Rating: 3 stars
Headline: Set in Romania, this interesting collection of stories is held back by its numerous grammatical errors
Review:
Written by author Dana Manoli, Patches is a cross-generational novel set in Romania spanning circa several hundred years. Following the lives of six women, the novel is comprised of six short stories (or “books”) which follows the plights of its female protagonists as each fight’s to reshape their destiny against a backdrop of cultural resistance. From Katarina, who is running away from a forced marriage to Dafina, a teacher treading a fine line with administering education in a multicultural school, the stories aim to challenge readers on any assumption that society has become more liberal over time. As Manoli notions, “does modern tolerance overcome past prejudices, or are we just reshaping old injustices?”
Patches is a pleasant read, with a nice use of mediums to influence the style and personality of each. Dafina’s story makes use of back-and-forth letters and Ada’s is entirely told through diary entries. This helps prevent the tales from feeling repetitive or undistinguishable. There are some great turns of phrase to be discovered in this collection of short stories, including a personal favourite, “Dafina’s voice is dry as her mother’s medicinal herbs.” The six short stories are broken up into chapters (meaning that no story is ever more than about fifty pages in length). For Eilna (number three), the story opens with “chapter nine”. Given each story is standalone, it might have made more sense to start each “book” with chapter one. For the most part all the stories are set in the present tense (more on this point to follow).
Where this book holds itself back is in its grammar. Patches is the first book this Romanian author has written in the English language which, outside of this book review, needs to be acknowledged. Manoli’s ability to write something of this standard in a second language is a challenge that few native English speakers would attempt to take on. That said, it would be wrong to consider this in isolation when it ultimately this a book aimed at an English-reading audience, battling alongside other historical novels of its type. With this in mind, the grammar is off in places, with the tenses slipping into past, incorrect use of semicolons and turns of phrase that do not quite make sense (yet might do for Romanian readers). The best way to rectify these would be to employ the use of a professional copy/line editor who is a native English speaker.
Patches is a solid book with layered meaning and merit to its strong cast of female characters. A good starting point for any future publications penned in English, a personal recommendation would be to locate beta readers or a proficient editor. This has the potential to be a five star read, yet ultimately is only hampered by the number of small grammatical errors which add friction to the reading journey.
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Links:
Reedsy Discovery Review: AEB Reviews – “Patches” by Dana Manoli
Purchase Link: “Patches” by Dana Manoli (Amazon)
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